浙江省金華市孝順高級(jí)中學(xué)2024屆高考英語(yǔ)作文專題復(fù)習(xí)：寫作指導(dǎo)及學(xué)生習(xí)作

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　　每到高三的時(shí)候，在部分學(xué)生當(dāng)中就會(huì)出現(xiàn)一些薄弱學(xué)科。因此，學(xué)校會(huì)組織一些“中轉(zhuǎn)優(yōu)”工作。我們從12月份開始了這樣的工作。年級(jí)布置給我們的任務(wù)是“解難答疑”，我任教高三（1）和高三（12班）， “中轉(zhuǎn)優(yōu)”兩個(gè)班共10人。第一次我按照級(jí)部的要求我讓他們把前一階段學(xué)習(xí)中存在的問題提出來(lái)，當(dāng)場(chǎng)給他們分別解答。一節(jié)課的時(shí)間很快過去了，但當(dāng)同學(xué)們離開之后，我心里總有種說不出的滋味，輔導(dǎo)的事情是做了，但這樣做的效率到底如何，不問學(xué)生我自己也知道答案。所謂師者，傳道、授業(yè)解惑也。這樣的問題方式完全可以放在課后，學(xué)生有問題問一下也就行了，何必拿出單獨(dú)的時(shí)間來(lái)輔導(dǎo)呢？經(jīng)過反思我從第二節(jié)課開始改變了教學(xué)的方式，我把一節(jié)課分成兩個(gè)部分：1.集中解決學(xué)生以往學(xué)習(xí)中存在問題，讓其他學(xué)生解答，讓學(xué)生教學(xué)生，特殊的問題由教師作答；2.圍繞一個(gè)主題啟發(fā)學(xué)生的發(fā)散思維，給出關(guān)鍵詞，然后讓學(xué)生寫成一篇作文。

　　第二節(jié)課上，在集中答疑之后，我開始幫助學(xué)生復(fù)習(xí)十二個(gè)月份的英語(yǔ)單詞，這些單詞對(duì)于高三的學(xué)生問題并不是太大，但我的用意并不是解決他們的單詞問題，而是要讓他們有一個(gè)明確的時(shí)間概念。隨后我在黑板上寫下了“June”。然后問他們“What’s special about June?” 有個(gè)學(xué)生在下面低聲說 “要高考了”。我隨即問到“How do you express ‘高考’ in English?” 這時(shí)他們都面面相覷,可以看出他們平時(shí)的詞匯積累是不夠的,我在黑板上寫下 “the National Entrance Examination is coming.” 我又問到: “Can we use any other similar word to take place of ‘coming’?” 其中一個(gè)答到: approaching.

　　T: What do you think of the National Entrance Examination?

　　S1: Fierce, competitive.

　　S2: It decides/ determines our fate.

　　T: What do you want to do after the exam?

　　S1: Relaxing.

　　S2: Make preparations for college life.

　　T: When you finish your middle school life, it means you are liberated and aren’t middle school students any more. You’ll be grown-ups or adults. Do you know what means?

　　S1: Make contributions to our society.

　　S2:Major in what we are interested in and learn some useful knowledge.

　　T: As a grown-up, you should be responsible for your deeds or behaviours.

　　Maybe you have a lot to think and write about. I’ll give you 20 minutes to write a short passage in class.

　　在課堂教學(xué)的過程中，我通過師生之間的一問一答把我想要他們寫的作文可能遇到的知識(shí)上的難點(diǎn)逐漸地展開，在問答過程中我隨時(shí)寫下一些關(guān)鍵詞在黑板上：the National Entrance Examination， approach， liberate，fierce， competitive， adult， responsible， make contributions to， set foot on society， major in， master， concentrate/focus on， be buried in books.

　　2.題目自擬，文體不限。

　　3.當(dāng)堂課完成。

　　本節(jié)課的教學(xué)目的是：1.圍繞一個(gè)主題復(fù)習(xí)相關(guān)的知識(shí)，幫助他們建立知識(shí)樹。解決他們基礎(chǔ)知識(shí)中的薄弱點(diǎn)，也讓他們對(duì)以往的知識(shí)記憶起來(lái)相對(duì)容易些。2.讓他們?cè)谕ㄟ^課堂上的啟發(fā)和點(diǎn)撥之后能順利完成規(guī)定話題的寫作，培養(yǎng)學(xué)生的發(fā)散思維能力。3.幫助他們樹立時(shí)間的緊迫感和對(duì)社會(huì)的責(zé)任感。

　　這節(jié)課學(xué)生寫作任務(wù)完成的很順利，在規(guī)定時(shí)間里基本完成了布置給他們的任務(wù)。在批改的過程中，我覺得他們作文寫得出乎我的意料。現(xiàn)摘錄下來(lái)供大家分析。

　　高三(1) 王琎

　　June

　　June is a special month to me， because I was born in June. I have a special feeling about June. Also, June in 2010 will be a meaningful month for me, because of the approaching of the National Entrance Examination.

　　As is known to all, the National Entrance Examination is very important for us students. After the exam, not only will I be liberated, but also I will be an adult. As with many adults, I will have many responsibilities. I should be responsible for my behaviours. I can’t do the things that I want to .

　　In order to be responsible for my family, I am supposed to have a good job. So it is necessary for me to study some skills. Then I will study in a university and major in what I am interested in. During the time in the university, I will work hard and do many extra materials so that I will be good at the skills. After I master the skills, I will step into society and make contributions to our country and my family members.

　　I believe that the National Entrance Examination will determine my fate, so I will be buried in my study and work hard.

　　我批閱他的作文的時(shí)候,給他指出了當(dāng)中的一些小錯(cuò)誤,對(duì)他的作文評(píng)價(jià)是:行文流暢、所學(xué)知識(shí)使用合理、書寫急待提高。

　　June is hot but relaxing. The National Entrance Examination is approaching and we are facing the fate.

　　In order to be admitted to a good university, we need to do a lot of things. We need to go over our knowledge; we need to go gain the feeling of the exam , and most of all, we should try to control our minds so that we calm ourselves down to do the examination.

　　After the examination, we will be free. Anything that wouldn’t be allowed before will be fine, playing day after day, even we can make our own girlfriends. As far as I’m concerned, though I don’t believe in love, I also want to make a friend and treat her as a girlfriend. Love is hard, but is dependent on you.

　　University is a place for further study. Learning useful skills , developing the wisdom, strengthening the body, only by relying on yourself, will you expend your area in heart.

　　Take on your duty, love your classmates and teachers, and show your kindness like the sunshine in June.

　　June must be a month with endless experiences. May it be a turning point in your fate, during which you will grow up.

　　Set foot on your future, I long to see what will happen, and what I will get.

　　給他的評(píng)語(yǔ)是：整篇文章行文比較優(yōu)美，但連貫性欠缺，書寫較以前有很大進(jìn)步，要力求避免一些低級(jí)錯(cuò)誤。

　　Everyone has a lot of imaginations about June. June is a season full of different mood. Students may feel nervous in June because they will take the National Entrance Examination. The examination will certainly decide their fates. If a student achieve a success, he may feel excited and relaxed. NMET is a fierce competition. Every student should try his best to prepare for the examination. After the NMET, it means that we are frown-ups, and then we will have to make contributions to the society and our parents. Before this, we should master some skills so that we can survive in the world. So, we should make the hot June more wonderful so that we can make our life more wonderful.

　　June is coming. Let’s make preparations for it. We are supposed to check all the knowledge that we studied. If we devote our hearts and time to our study, we can gain all the happiness in the end.

　　給他的評(píng)語(yǔ)是:文章基本流暢,運(yùn)用了所學(xué)的熟悉的知識(shí)來(lái)表達(dá)自己的思想,段落層次還不夠分明,有一些小錯(cuò)誤要盡力避免。

　　Teachers say that June is equal to our fates. For the National Entrance Examination is approaching, we should work harder. Do you find that your classmates are buried in their books after class, and also they do many extra materials. So the month is full of competition. What’s more, after June we will be thoroughly liberated, we can do whatever we like. Then you will set foot on the university, majoring in what you are interested in. On the other hand, you should master modern technology so that you can find a better job to support your family. As we are grown-ups, it can’t be denied that we should be responsible for our deeds.

　　Over the past few years, we have studied a lot. Just work harder and you will succeed. Best wishes for you to live your dream in June.

　　給她的評(píng)語(yǔ)是：書寫美觀整潔、文章基本上能夠達(dá)意、在思想性和連貫性方面還需要努力。

　　June is a month which is filled with joy, but the next June will decide our fate, because we will have the National Entrance Examination.

　　The big day is approaching, we feel much more stressed. To achieve a high grade and live our dreams, we must make the most of time to review our knowledge and do some extra materials. Though we are buried in books, don’t forget to set a proper goal, it will help you to improve your confidence.

　　After the examination, whatever you get, June will be a large liberation. The moment you graduate from the Senior High, you will step into society, which is full of fierce competitions. In order to live by ourselves, we must major in what we are interested in, when we are at college. What’s most important at college is that we should master skills and improve our abilities.

　　If we try our best to achieve this goal, we will be able to make more contributions to our country and society.

　　給她的評(píng)語(yǔ)是：書寫工整，文章本來(lái)可以更流暢些，因?yàn)槠磳戝e(cuò)誤和一些小的錯(cuò)誤影響了讀者的閱讀。