考研英語復習資料考研英語作文范文的批改13

　　Im writing to apply for the position of Industrial Designer which you advertised in newspapers.

　　Therere a number of reasons which I can qualify for this job. The first and foremost, I major in Design in University, and I can work in it faster than others. Second, I have some years of work experience about this job. At last, I not only have the capacity of the social contact, but also have the enthusiasm about this position.

　　I would appreciate it if you would send me a reply at your earliest convenience.

　　Yours sincerely

　　Li Ming

　　考研英語作文批改點評如下：

　　Dear Sir or Madam, Im writing to apply for the position of Industrial Designer which you advertised in newspapers. Therere a number of reasons which I can qualify for this job. The first and foremost(因為信件本身比較簡潔，不要用很多的連詞), I major in Design in University(沒有說是具體的哪一所大學，不用大寫首字母), and I can work in it faster than others(最好不要這樣和別人進行比較，另外你不知道別的應聘者的水平). Second, I have some years of work experience about this job. At last, I not only have the capacity of the social contact, but also have the enthusiasm about this position. I would appreciate it if you would send me a reply at your earliest convenience. Yours sincerely(加逗號) Li Ming(與上邊一行不要離這么遠，落款這一部分要寫在右下角) 點評：6-7分寫的還不錯的。寫作內(nèi)容方面需要適當調(diào)整，建議同學看一些范文。

　　Im writing to apply for the position of Industrial Designer which you advertised in newspapers.

　　Therere a number of reasons which I can qualify for this job. The first and foremost, I major in Design in University, and I can work in it faster than others. Second, I have some years of work experience about this job. At last, I not only have the capacity of the social contact, but also have the enthusiasm about this position.

　　I would appreciate it if you would send me a reply at your earliest convenience.

　　Yours sincerely

　　Li Ming

　　考研英語作文批改點評如下：

　　Dear Sir or Madam, Im writing to apply for the position of Industrial Designer which you advertised in newspapers. Therere a number of reasons which I can qualify for this job. The first and foremost(因為信件本身比較簡潔，不要用很多的連詞), I major in Design in University(沒有說是具體的哪一所大學，不用大寫首字母), and I can work in it faster than others(最好不要這樣和別人進行比較，另外你不知道別的應聘者的水平). Second, I have some years of work experience about this job. At last, I not only have the capacity of the social contact, but also have the enthusiasm about this position. I would appreciate it if you would send me a reply at your earliest convenience. Yours sincerely(加逗號) Li Ming(與上邊一行不要離這么遠，落款這一部分要寫在右下角) 點評：6-7分寫的還不錯的。寫作內(nèi)容方面需要適當調(diào)整，建議同學看一些范文。