考研英語復習資料考研英語作文范文的批改65
考研英語待批改作文:
Cover Letter
October 19,2011
Dear Sir or Madam,
Having seen your job offer advertised in Chengdu Daily Paper yesterday, I would like to apply for the position and I hope I might be able to interview with your training center.
I shall be very grateful if you will kindly let me know as soon as possible the prospect of success of my application.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
考研英語作文批改點評如下:
Dear Sir or Madam, Having seen your job offer advertised in Chengdu Daily Paper yesterday, I would like to apply for the position and I hope I might be able to interview with your training center(這里想要表達什么?). Im a Chemistry teacher at a middle school, (加連詞and)I received M.A. degree of Chemical Biology last year. The job described in your newspaper seems suited to my background, and Im confident that I would be able to perform the job to your satisfaction. I have enclosed my resume and I would be most obliged if you would give me the chance to interview your firm. I shall be very grateful if you will kindly let me know as soon as possible the prospect of success of my application. Yours sincerely, Li Ming 點評:5-6分不知道你應聘的是什么職業(yè),第二段沒有介紹太多實質(zhì)性的內(nèi)容,而且最后一句的后半句可以去掉。
考研英語待批改作文:
Cover Letter
October 19,2011
Dear Sir or Madam,
Having seen your job offer advertised in Chengdu Daily Paper yesterday, I would like to apply for the position and I hope I might be able to interview with your training center.
I shall be very grateful if you will kindly let me know as soon as possible the prospect of success of my application.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
考研英語作文批改點評如下:
Dear Sir or Madam, Having seen your job offer advertised in Chengdu Daily Paper yesterday, I would like to apply for the position and I hope I might be able to interview with your training center(這里想要表達什么?). Im a Chemistry teacher at a middle school, (加連詞and)I received M.A. degree of Chemical Biology last year. The job described in your newspaper seems suited to my background, and Im confident that I would be able to perform the job to your satisfaction. I have enclosed my resume and I would be most obliged if you would give me the chance to interview your firm. I shall be very grateful if you will kindly let me know as soon as possible the prospect of success of my application. Yours sincerely, Li Ming 點評:5-6分不知道你應聘的是什么職業(yè),第二段沒有介紹太多實質(zhì)性的內(nèi)容,而且最后一句的后半句可以去掉。