英語六級2分作文范文的批改2
英語六級待批改作文:
With the development of society, there are increasingly individuals who have got psychical disease. Furthermore, they also dont know psychical disease will lead to disease.
There are some reason for this phenomenon. Firstly, people will have pressure of heavy work, even some people lose the job. They feel very sad and lose value in society. Secondly, they lack of communication with others, and close their thought. Because of they stay online when finish work and so on. They should pay more attention to the situation.
As far as I am concerned. In order to keep our healthy psychical environment. They can do some exercise on their free-times and talk with their friends usually. It is best way of relax. This ways can help us take mind off the job. I believe we will gain more achievement in our future.
作文批改如下：
With the development of society, there are increasingly individuals who have got psychical disease. Furthermore, they also dont know psychical disease will lead to disease.
There are some reason(加s) for this phenomenon. Firstly, people will have pressure of heavy work, even some people lose the job society. Secondly, they lack of (刪除)communication with others, and close their thought. Because of (刪除，因?yàn)閎ecause of 后面不能加句子)they stay online when finish work and so on(刪除，另外，不能理解你本句要表達(dá)的意思與上一句有何關(guān)系). They should pay more attention to the situation.
As far as I am concerned. (改為逗號) In order to keep our healthy psychical environment(改為us psychologically healthy).They can do some exercise on theirfree-times and talk with their friends usually. It is best way of relax. This ways can help us take mind off the job. I believe we will gain more achievement in our future.(你寫的是在未來會獲得更大的成功，這與心理健康問題無關(guān))
同學(xué)你好，你需要提高英語的表達(dá)能力，建議你多背一些好的范文，摘抄一些好的句子，并將其運(yùn)用到你的作文之中，另外，要注意單復(fù)數(shù)以及主謂一致的問題。
英語六級待批改作文:
With the development of society, there are increasingly individuals who have got psychical disease. Furthermore, they also dont know psychical disease will lead to disease.
There are some reason for this phenomenon. Firstly, people will have pressure of heavy work, even some people lose the job. They feel very sad and lose value in society. Secondly, they lack of communication with others, and close their thought. Because of they stay online when finish work and so on. They should pay more attention to the situation.
As far as I am concerned. In order to keep our healthy psychical environment. They can do some exercise on their free-times and talk with their friends usually. It is best way of relax. This ways can help us take mind off the job. I believe we will gain more achievement in our future.
作文批改如下：
With the development of society, there are increasingly individuals who have got psychical disease. Furthermore, they also dont know psychical disease will lead to disease.
There are some reason(加s) for this phenomenon. Firstly, people will have pressure of heavy work, even some people lose the job society. Secondly, they lack of (刪除)communication with others, and close their thought. Because of (刪除，因?yàn)閎ecause of 后面不能加句子)they stay online when finish work and so on(刪除，另外，不能理解你本句要表達(dá)的意思與上一句有何關(guān)系). They should pay more attention to the situation.
As far as I am concerned. (改為逗號) In order to keep our healthy psychical environment(改為us psychologically healthy).They can do some exercise on theirfree-times and talk with their friends usually. It is best way of relax. This ways can help us take mind off the job. I believe we will gain more achievement in our future.(你寫的是在未來會獲得更大的成功，這與心理健康問題無關(guān))
同學(xué)你好，你需要提高英語的表達(dá)能力，建議你多背一些好的范文，摘抄一些好的句子，并將其運(yùn)用到你的作文之中，另外，要注意單復(fù)數(shù)以及主謂一致的問題。
