四級考試寫作范文點評2
注：1. As is often pointed out by some people = Some people think that
2. 使不用make，而用keep, allow, offer
However, other people insist that television is a curse rather than a blessing. They argue that it has brought about many serious problems. The major one is its effects on young people. They are now so used to getting their information, education and entertainment from television that their literacy as well as physical ability has been greatly weakened. Even worse than that, vulgar commercials and indecent programs may cultivate their bad tastes, distort their viewpoints towards human life to such a degree that their minds might be corrupted.
In summary, television has both advantages and disadvantages. Whatever effects it has, one thing is certain, television in itself is neither good nor bad. It is the uses to which it is put that determines its value to society.
范文5. Travelling
People who like travelling have their reasons. They maintain that travelling can help them expand their scope of knowledge, especially geographical and historical learning. They go on to point out that touring will provide more chance for them to enjoy food and try on clothes that they otherwise cannot possible have.
注：geographical and historical 押尾韻，如：押頭韻 clear clean
Those who dislike travelling have their reasons. They would argue that travelling means a considerable amount of money and energy. For example, traffic and accommodation require money and walking while seeing sights often tires you.
In practice, travelling does more good than harm. If your finance and health permit, you might as well do some travelling from time to time. It will at least enable you to get familiar with people and things that you will probably grow to like and love.
注：1. in practice = I think 2. does more good than harm 好處比壞處多，其他表達(dá)方法：be superior to/ inferior to 比如：the advantages are superior to the disadvantages 3. enable 使
范文1. Is a Test of Spoken English Necessary?
A test of spoken English will be included as an optional component of the College English Test . Some people argue that it is absolutely necessary to hold a test of spoken English in China because we have been informed frequently that a Chinese student who has been learning English for over ten years cannot even communicate with a native speaker. Sometimes even those top students who excel in grammar and writing skills find their English inadequate to express their thoughts freely. A test of English will bring the college students an awareness of the importance of oral English, and will thus help them with their communicating skills.
使句子具有表現(xiàn)力的手段：1、用形容詞修飾名詞;2、副詞修飾動詞、副詞修飾形容詞
On the other hand, some others still maintain that a good command of reading and writing skills will be enough for the English learners. To some extent their opinion derives from the fact that students are already under considerable pressure from their opinion derives from the fact that students are already under considerable pressure from their coursework. Another required test will only add to their burden. Moreover, some students may take the shortcut by focusing on several guessed questions according to the fixed format of the test, hoping for a coincidence to bring them good luck.
In my opinion, a test of spoken English will do more good than harm. Since China will continue its policy of opening and reform, the ability to speak English fluently is a must for anyone who wants to surpass others in a highly competitive society. Whether I take the test or not, I shall spare no efforts to practice oral English in the remaining years of my college study.
范文21. Should smoking be banned?
Should smoking be banned? Answers to this question vary greatly. Some people are in favor of the idea of smoking. They always say that it can get rid of the tiredness and make them refreshed. And they also say that giving and being given cigarettes is a sign of friendship. Therefore, they carry cigarettes with them wherever they go.
注：1. vary greatly 許多種2. be in favor of = agree/ be of the opinion that
3. get rid of the tiredness and make them refreshed 使人神清氣爽
4. Giving and being given 給與被給。主、被動關(guān)系在英文中用現(xiàn)在、過去分詞表達(dá)。
But other people consider it very harmful to peoples health. They have heard the official reports that one person in the world dies from smoking every second. And they have heard the doctors warning that smokers are more likely to have lung cancer and to increase their chances of having heart attack. In addition, smoking pollutes the air and may cause fire accidents. Thus it has become a major threat to peoples life and property.
注：1.They have heard the official reports that ... 官方報告表明.. 2. be more likely to 更有可能，更容易3. chance 可能
There is some truth in both arguments, but humans life and property outweighs anything else. If smoking brings us illness and death, why not have it banned by the government? Without cigarettes, cant we come up with better ways to express our friendship and to make us refreshed?注：1. outweigh 比重要，同樣的表達(dá)：be superior to/ be inferior to。overweight 超重2. 最后用兩句反問句結(jié)尾，非常精妙。
課后作業(yè) Private Cars
寫成4段的首段寫法：
?、?In recent years, with fast economic growth, private cars have appeared in many families in China. Peoples attitude toward private cars varies widely.
?、?With the increase in the general standard of living, some ordinary Chinese families begin to afford a private car. Yet, peoples opinions of private cars vary from person to person/ public attitude toward it varies greatly/ widely./ is quite of the contrary./ differs sharply.
?、?In recent few years, the phenomenon/ issue/ problem of owning a private car has been brought to public attention/ in the limelight. Peoples views on/ opinions of owing a private car vary widely.
寫成3段的首段寫法：
With the development of modern society/ science and technology, / With the improvement of peoples living standard,
more and more people can own private cars.
cars are entering ordinary families.
the growing number of people/ people in ever increasing numbers can have access to private cars.
支持段的主題句：
Some people claim that/ As is pointed out that/ It is generally believed that/ It is widely accepted that, there are some advantages of owning a private car.
There is no doubt that private cars benefit people hugely.
支持段的分論點：
?、?方便 First, private cars provide people with the most convenient form of transportation.
② 舒適 Second, it is comfortable for people to travel in, especially in changeable weather/ raining days/ sand storm.
注：1. As is often pointed out by some people = Some people think that
2. 使不用make，而用keep, allow, offer
However, other people insist that television is a curse rather than a blessing. They argue that it has brought about many serious problems. The major one is its effects on young people. They are now so used to getting their information, education and entertainment from television that their literacy as well as physical ability has been greatly weakened. Even worse than that, vulgar commercials and indecent programs may cultivate their bad tastes, distort their viewpoints towards human life to such a degree that their minds might be corrupted.
In summary, television has both advantages and disadvantages. Whatever effects it has, one thing is certain, television in itself is neither good nor bad. It is the uses to which it is put that determines its value to society.
范文5. Travelling
People who like travelling have their reasons. They maintain that travelling can help them expand their scope of knowledge, especially geographical and historical learning. They go on to point out that touring will provide more chance for them to enjoy food and try on clothes that they otherwise cannot possible have.
注：geographical and historical 押尾韻，如：押頭韻 clear clean
Those who dislike travelling have their reasons. They would argue that travelling means a considerable amount of money and energy. For example, traffic and accommodation require money and walking while seeing sights often tires you.
In practice, travelling does more good than harm. If your finance and health permit, you might as well do some travelling from time to time. It will at least enable you to get familiar with people and things that you will probably grow to like and love.
注：1. in practice = I think 2. does more good than harm 好處比壞處多，其他表達(dá)方法：be superior to/ inferior to 比如：the advantages are superior to the disadvantages 3. enable 使
范文1. Is a Test of Spoken English Necessary?
A test of spoken English will be included as an optional component of the College English Test . Some people argue that it is absolutely necessary to hold a test of spoken English in China because we have been informed frequently that a Chinese student who has been learning English for over ten years cannot even communicate with a native speaker. Sometimes even those top students who excel in grammar and writing skills find their English inadequate to express their thoughts freely. A test of English will bring the college students an awareness of the importance of oral English, and will thus help them with their communicating skills.
使句子具有表現(xiàn)力的手段：1、用形容詞修飾名詞;2、副詞修飾動詞、副詞修飾形容詞
On the other hand, some others still maintain that a good command of reading and writing skills will be enough for the English learners. To some extent their opinion derives from the fact that students are already under considerable pressure from their opinion derives from the fact that students are already under considerable pressure from their coursework. Another required test will only add to their burden. Moreover, some students may take the shortcut by focusing on several guessed questions according to the fixed format of the test, hoping for a coincidence to bring them good luck.
In my opinion, a test of spoken English will do more good than harm. Since China will continue its policy of opening and reform, the ability to speak English fluently is a must for anyone who wants to surpass others in a highly competitive society. Whether I take the test or not, I shall spare no efforts to practice oral English in the remaining years of my college study.
范文21. Should smoking be banned?
Should smoking be banned? Answers to this question vary greatly. Some people are in favor of the idea of smoking. They always say that it can get rid of the tiredness and make them refreshed. And they also say that giving and being given cigarettes is a sign of friendship. Therefore, they carry cigarettes with them wherever they go.
注：1. vary greatly 許多種2. be in favor of = agree/ be of the opinion that
3. get rid of the tiredness and make them refreshed 使人神清氣爽
4. Giving and being given 給與被給。主、被動關(guān)系在英文中用現(xiàn)在、過去分詞表達(dá)。
But other people consider it very harmful to peoples health. They have heard the official reports that one person in the world dies from smoking every second. And they have heard the doctors warning that smokers are more likely to have lung cancer and to increase their chances of having heart attack. In addition, smoking pollutes the air and may cause fire accidents. Thus it has become a major threat to peoples life and property.
注：1.They have heard the official reports that ... 官方報告表明.. 2. be more likely to 更有可能，更容易3. chance 可能
There is some truth in both arguments, but humans life and property outweighs anything else. If smoking brings us illness and death, why not have it banned by the government? Without cigarettes, cant we come up with better ways to express our friendship and to make us refreshed?注：1. outweigh 比重要，同樣的表達(dá)：be superior to/ be inferior to。overweight 超重2. 最后用兩句反問句結(jié)尾，非常精妙。
課后作業(yè) Private Cars
寫成4段的首段寫法：
?、?In recent years, with fast economic growth, private cars have appeared in many families in China. Peoples attitude toward private cars varies widely.
② With the increase in the general standard of living, some ordinary Chinese families begin to afford a private car. Yet, peoples opinions of private cars vary from person to person/ public attitude toward it varies greatly/ widely./ is quite of the contrary./ differs sharply.
?、?In recent few years, the phenomenon/ issue/ problem of owning a private car has been brought to public attention/ in the limelight. Peoples views on/ opinions of owing a private car vary widely.
寫成3段的首段寫法：
With the development of modern society/ science and technology, / With the improvement of peoples living standard,
more and more people can own private cars.
cars are entering ordinary families.
the growing number of people/ people in ever increasing numbers can have access to private cars.
支持段的主題句：
Some people claim that/ As is pointed out that/ It is generally believed that/ It is widely accepted that, there are some advantages of owning a private car.
There is no doubt that private cars benefit people hugely.
支持段的分論點：
?、?方便 First, private cars provide people with the most convenient form of transportation.
?、?舒適 Second, it is comfortable for people to travel in, especially in changeable weather/ raining days/ sand storm.
